Writing is a process, and the first draft is rarely perfect. Strong writers improve their work through revision. After reviewing and revising your literary argument paragraph, what changes did you make to strengthen your writing?

 prompt: most of my changes were regarding the details of my explanation and evidence. In my paragraph I had the evidence that I wanted to use but I had to work on using the proper details and analysis to explain the evidence. That's what most of my revisions are centered around, as well as just being generally more concise and clear.

summary: worked on revisions

reflection: learned how to apply clear commentary to evidence in writing

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